Peer Review 2- Greg Coustas

Kia ora Gregory, (this is hello in Maori)

May I just begin by saying what an interesting topic you have chosen to write about this week. I like how you have expanded your readings and have chosen to tackle something a little different.

As a girl with Kiwi roots, I really enjoyed reading about the Pop up Globe Buckingham Company and how they infused both modernism (speaking in Maori and slang) and traditionalism (all men on stage) into their performance. I like how you have delved into examining two different reviews and looked at both the positive and negative aspects of speaking in the traditional Maori tongue. This allows your reader to remain open-minded and to decide for themselves whether or not they would enjoy such a play.

I wholeheartedly agree with your comment about how readers who perhaps have never read or seen the play, would “miss out on the lyrical and carefully constructed poetry of the fairies.” I believe that there is a sense of magic created when the fairies speak, and perhaps this sense of magic may not be felt or interpreted by an audience member with limited knowledge of the play.

Nonetheless, your thorough review of this performance has me thinking I might purchase a ticket myself. Perhaps I’ll need to purchase a Maori-English dictionary first though…

Well Done!

Note:
Just be wary of spelling
Separate instead of seperate
Erratically instead of erraticaly
Positions instead of postion

https://gregcoustasblog.wordpress.com/2019/03/17/a-midsummer-nights-dream-in-review-week-3-blog/comment-page-1/?unapproved=46&moderation-hash=58c7003f667c352c9652257954ec7f91#comment-46

Peer Review 4- Laura Nash

Hi Laura,

I really enjoyed reading Ariel’s perspective on his debt to Prospero. You paint such a vivid image of Ariel, describing him as “hot as volcanic lava” and a “winged creature to torment pathetic souls.” I also like how you have made him omniscient, it gives him this sense of power that I believe is absent in ‘The Tempest’. You highlight Ariel’s mischievous side, “When I get the chance, it is enjoyable to meddle in their trivial affairs”, which is important because it is his defining characteristic in the play and brings a sense of authenticity to your description.Overall, I thought this was an enjoyable read and a nice interpretation of Ariel’s character.

The only things I would note is the slight spelling errors.

Loose should be changed to lose

Hot as a volcanic lava” should just be hot as volcanic lava. The ‘a’ may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun lava.

https://lauranash1.wordpress.com/2019/04/09/ariel-from-the-tempest/

Peer Review 3- Elora Woods

Hi Elora,

May I just begin by saying thank you for sharing your story. I understand that this can often be a taboo subject and difficult to confront, so to witness a woman standing up and saying “this is what happened to me” is really inspiring. I wish more women had the courage to come forward and share their stories like you have today.

I’m really sorry to hear of all the horrendous things you and your friends have encountered. It saddens me to say that I too can relate to what you have experienced, having endured many of the things you have mentioned myself.

What I really love about your blog is the fact that despite all the bad impressions that a lot of boys have left on you, you do not shame men as a whole. You talk about how you have found a man who has “made it his primary mission to replace every one of your ‘self-hating’ thoughts into ‘self-loving’ ones”, and I think that is really beautiful.

Thank you again for sharing your story, it’s women like you who give other women the courage to speak up and tell theirs.

https://cardiophobicspokenword.wordpress.com/

 

Peer Review 2- Greg Coustas

Kia ora Gregory, (this is hello in Maori)

May I just begin by saying what an interesting topic you have chosen to write about this week. I like how you have expanded your readings and have chosen to tackle something a little different.

As a girl with Kiwi roots, I really enjoyed reading about the Pop up Globe Buckingham Company and how they infused both modernism (speaking in Maori and slang) and traditionalism (all men on stage) into their performance. I like how you have delved into examining two different reviews and looked at both the positive and negative aspects of speaking in the traditional Maori tongue. This allows your reader to remain open-minded and to decide for themselves whether or not they would enjoy such a play.

I wholeheartedly agree with your comment about how readers who perhaps have never read or seen the play, would “miss out on the lyrical and carefully constructed poetry of the fairies.” I believe that there is a sense of magic created when the fairies speak, and perhaps this sense of magic may not be felt or interpreted by an audience member with limited knowledge of the play.

Nonetheless, your thorough review of this performance has me thinking I might purchase a ticket myself. Perhaps I’ll need to purchase a Maori-English dictionary first though…

Well Done!

Note:
Just be weary of spelling
Separate instead of seperate
Erratically instead of erraticaly
Positions instead of postion

https://gregcoustasblog.wordpress.com/2019/03/17/a-midsummer-nights-dream-in-review-week-3-blog/comment-page-1/?unapproved=46&moderation-hash=58c7003f667c352c9652257954ec7f91#comment-46

Peer Review 1- Heather Broomham

Hi Heather,

May I just begin by saying how blown away I am by your honesty and your ability to be vulnerable. This can often be difficult, but the courage you have demonstrated in your writing makes you admirable. I also want to commend you for taking on a Literature course, despite the fact you struggle with spelling and words in general. Again, this shows courage and a sense of intelligence as you wish to challenge yourself and “open up new doors.”

I think you have done really well for your first blog. The way you describe how you’re feeling on your first day, “My body began to sweat, I felt every drop run down my chest” was a really beautiful piece of writing that appealed to my emotions and even made me feel nervous for you!

You should be really proud of yourself for taking on this journey and don’t forget to enjoy the ride along the way. I too sometimes doubt my abilities and can often lose confidence in myself, so I understand where you are coming from. I constantly remind myself that everyone is on a learning journey and that no one is judging you, as everyone is at different points on that journey. Take the compliments and the criticism with open arms and be the best writer you can!

Congratulations on everything you have achieved so far, I look forward to reading more of your blogs.

Lili (current ACU student) 🙂

First Day