Peer Review 3- Victoria

Hi Victoria,

What an incredibly wonderful and visual letter you have written to Louisa.

I really like your continual references to the night sky and space. This creates a sense of wonder and magic in your letter.

I like how you start your letter with “Have you noticed the moon tonight?”. It made me as the reader think, have I noticed the moon recently? Have I taken time out of my frantic day to appreciate the little wonders of the world?

Your letter includes a real visual feast for the reader to reflect upon.

I also like your inclusion of Sissy and how you describe her mind and imagination compared to Louisa. “Sissy has been to the moon, go talk to her and dream out loud together.” This is a wonderful line and in my opinion, encapsulates Sissy’s ability to wonder and imagine beautifully.

A fantastic job overall.

Well done Victoria!


Peer Review 2- GEORGIA

Hi Georgia,

What a truly beautiful letter you have written. To me, it was filled with a sense of wisdom, kindness, and magic.

I really loved how you focused on telling child Georgia that the important things in life are found within the natural world. Your line “You see the magnificence of the natural world, and it will be your greatest teacher if you let it” beautifully encapsulates this idea, while also echoing ideas from both ‘My heart leaps up’ and ‘The Word is too much for us’.

You also incorporate beautiful imagery in the way you explain how little Georgia looks at the world, such as the “glowing stars” and “snails climbing over dewy leaves”.

I think I was also so drawn to the letter because of the line “You will forget to be excited about animals and plants and the sky because you will be taught that other things are more important.” This saddened me because it is incredibly true, we often lose sight of what is important because society instructs us on what we should care about instead.

This is one of my favourite blogs I have ever read. Great job Georgia and I can’t wait to see what else you produce over the semester!

Peer Review 1- NANCY

Hi Nancy,

A great start to blogging this semester. Your blog was engaging and your interpretation of ‘wise passiveness’ was vivid and entertaining to read.

I like how you began by briefly analysing Wordsworth’s ‘Expostulation and reply’ which not only links to our class content but also shows that you demonstrate a good understanding of the poem itself.

I enjoyed reading about your moment of wise passiveness. Your description of “sunbeams with rays of light shining bright amongst the clouds vibrantly contrasting against the white and grey voluminous clouds” was beautifully vivid.

My only piece of advice would be to read through your blog carefully before posting it, just to fix up any little spelling errors.


Emotional instead of emotion

That can’t instead of what can’t

I think you have also included the word clouds once too many

Well done!